Rough Cut Feedback

I had many diffent responses from class members, family and friends regarding my rough cut.
Below are some examples of their comments:

• It's great to have the breathing before the visuals
• Good film title
• You should mix the soundtrack with the video noises instead of cutting it out.
• You should bring back the breathing at the end.
• You have obviously used editing to help build the narrative.
• Good variety of camera angles.
• Nice effects with the camcorder.
• Your other titles need finishing.

Here is a video of some of the comments from different people regarding my rough edit:

I have considered all of the above comments and decided to keep the soundtrack running all the way through the sequence and also, I used the breathing recording at the end again to add to the narrative.